Welcome to the blog for Prof. John Talbird's English 201 class. The purpose of this site is two-fold: 1) to continue the conversations we start in class (or to start conversations BEFORE we get to class) and 2) to practice our writing/reading on a weekly basis in an informal forum.

Saturday, March 14, 2015

Ardi's ABC story

“Always put the toilet seat down damnit!” Martha screams. 
“But that’s why I have you baby” Pete slowly replied while scratching his belly.  Closing the lid with a sigh, Martha makes her way to the living room.
 “Do you always have to play video games with your butt buddies on Xbox?”  Martha said.
“Every time you nag me like this, yah” he replies.
 “Found your other sock by the window by the way” she said. 
“Go squeeze it on a bottle, I am sure there is enough sweat to hydrate us for tonight” he replies. 

Hot was the forecast for that day.  It was a perfect day to go out. 
Judy calls Martha on her cell and screams “ARE YOU READY FOR TONIGHT? WOOOT!”  Knowing she was going to call, Martha had prepared her reply, “I was born ready.”

“Love you, can’t wait to see you and your outfit tonight” Judy replies and then hangs up.

“Man, she’s annoying as hell” Pete states. “Nooo, she’s not annoying, you’re annoying” she angrily replies.  Obscure clothing is not what’s “in” in the club and this dissatisfies Pete.  Pete puts on his jeans and he was ready.  Questioning himself in the mirror he finally says “eh whatever, I already have a girlfriend.”  Reluctantly, Pete goes into the bedroom to see what she had put on.  

Short, short, short, was all that came to Petes mind but he says “You look great baby!” Tonight they were going to a club in the city where a famous DJ that all the girls love was going to play.   Unknowingly however, the place was going to be overcrowded because it was teen night.  Voila! And just like that, they had made it to the club in his 1998 Camry.  “Wow, I can’t believe how crowded this place is!”  Judy says while laughing like a hyena.   Xclusive was the Dj’s name and was clearly highlighted throughout the club.  Yep, this was the night they were looking for in the end, it was everything the girls wanted!  Zipping through the streets, they finally get come home and Pete lets out a sigh of relief that another night has come to a close.
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I thought this was a little fun to be honest, however I also felt that it makes your story a little too restricted.  I do not feel like you have the ability to make many stories with this type of restriction.

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